Shock Wave

We have been learning to do other; other sentences, personification, figurative language and to take time to make changes. I think I did well in my assessment I got 85p, 90p, 60p adds up to 235 percent. It is a very sad story. I am building more confidence in other sentences and de; de sentences. I also need to have made more Improvements based on teacher feedback or lessons from my teachers or friends. 

 Intro                                

The bus suddenly pulled to a halt and my cousin, brother and I got out. We then took off running as the rain reminded us to get home. Some people like dogs; other people prefer cats. I like dogs the most . The rain starts to crawl down my forehead and onto my face making it harder to see.  I quickly glance up at the puppy kennel, " But where is my puppy? I couldn't think about that now. I quickly went diving into our warm welcoming house" Is anyone home?" My cousin asked,

.  "No,” I replied happily. “We're all alone and we can basically do whatever we want”.

                                           Terror

Ten minutes later my auntie zoomed down the driveway sending triplets of water flying. She gets out of the car and comes inside. "Where is my Zeus?" she asks, I don't know I replied as if I had coughed up a ball of yarn “ I haven't seen him”. The searching party went up and there he was: horror, shock, sadness, and anger swept through the house like wildfire. “No! ” I say starting to well up into tears as all these emotions overtake me. There my dog was hanging lifelessly on the electric wire. Dead or maybe unconscious. We quickly got him off the chain and took him to the vet.

                                       Hope 

I start to pray and ask God if my dog will live. Staying outside in the cold and waiting for my auntie's arrival. I couldn't believe what had happened, the consequence of my dog's actions was life-threatening. It was going to be a silent, cold night today. My aunty comes back down the road in her blue Mazda car. My pup Zeus was wrapped in a fluffy nice blanket. I ran down to greet them with open arms hoping dearly that he had survived. “The vet couldn't do anything for him” my auntie cries, making my heart sink like an anchor. I will never get my hopes up again. 

We dug a grave for my dear dog and carefully placed him in. We remembered all the wonderful times that we had with Zeus. I will never forget him. When lightning strikes it's a sign of a broken heart and when the rain pours I will know that it is a sign of tears and sadness. I will always remember you, Zeus.